You're very good at imagery. Your descriptions are very precise, evocative, and efficient.

My favorite line was:

“Who, else.” she said, finally putting out the cigarette, never having ashed it once. She lived her whole life like that.

because it was brilliant how you illustrated her attitude towards life with a casual, physical mannerism.

Congratulations on a short fiction, beautifully written, and I look forward to reading your future work.

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Dec 15, 2022·edited Dec 15, 2022Author

Thank you so much for the feedback, this made my day. Keep an eye out, I have a few longer pieces in the works.

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Much deserved.

I think you will enjoy this Substack poast, which is the first installment in a long series of writing tutorials designed for beginner and advanced writers to learn granular techniques.


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And yes, I am looking forward to following your stories. The AI art was also excellent, it set the tone and felt very appropriate for both the bank heist and the femme fatale.

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